WARNING: X-rated. 18+ only
Hey people, I’ve written a few short erotica, and I was wondering how to improve my stories. The story I’ll link here is the first story I’ve ever written to be posted anywhere. I’d just like to know what your thoughts are on this story and if you see anything you think is worth mentioning for future improvement.
The story: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/11778817/
Thank you for your time.