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Hand Boning
Ugh… What happened last night?" I open my eyes, everything was blurry.
I try to move my arms but I couldn’t move them. I glance over to my arms, my vision was still blurry but I could make out that my arms was tie down by 3 leather straps to arm rests. I try moving my legs but they was tie down too.
My vision starts to adjust a bit but I still couldn’t make out were im am yet. I started to small the air and it smells god awful, it smells like a mixture of fresh blood, dead flesh, and chemicals of sorts. I threw up a little in my mouth.
My vision had finally came back.
“Oh my God…”
All in front of me was dead creatures like humans. These humans look like they was going through so kind of transformation, half of their bodies was these dark green thick looking scales; their heads was shaped like a reptile’s head; their teeth was pointe; their eyes was like a reptile’s too but there was lifeless; their arms and legs was more muscular than any other normal human arms and legs are.
Some bodies was torn apart by the arms, legs, torso, and head was scattered everywhere; some of the bodies seem torn open at the belly and left hollow. Glasses fuel of different sorts’ chemicals, bloody knives and syringes was on metal tables.
“Where the hell am I?!?” I starts struggling, praying if I try hard enough that the straps might break.
About 10 minutes
“Damn it all!!” I tried but it was no use, these straps are way too strong for me to break. I let my head hang down, knowing that there is a strong possibility that I will die on this day or maybe night.
All of a sudden a door open from the wall in front of me. A person walks in, it was wearing black boots, black pants, a white lab coat with many blood stains, yellow gloves, and it had on a swamp green gas mask.
The person turns around and close the door. My eyes widened at what I saw, this person had an alligator tail.
The person walks up, grabs my chin, and stares into my eyes. I only stared back at him, I was so terrified of my scenario that I didn’t want to say anything to make my death come quicker.
“Are you scared right now my friend?” The person ask me. The person was a male, I assume by his manly, maybe late 30’s voice.
“Y-yes…Yes im am.” I simply answer.
“Well don’t be. Im gonna cure you of your sins.”
He lets go of my chin and he walks to a metal table with his back facing me.
“My sin?” I question.
“Yes that’s right. You’re a mammal but I should had said sins cause you’re a human too but don’t worry, like I said I will cure you of your sins.”
“But… What do you mean?”
“Ever since you mammals had walk this planet you have brought nothing misery to us.”
“Misery? Misery to who and what did we do?”
“Misery… Misery to us Reptiles! You destroy are homes, food, and are people! You are nothing but demons!!!” He yells.
I silent myself, I don’t want to make him mad.
He laughs “im sorry for yelling. It’s just I get very work up when people ask me that but anyway do you have any more questions?”
“Um… yes I do, a few actually. What happened to all these people?”
“All of these people were test subjects for a very special transformation formula. Unfortunately none of them could survived the transform so I use some of their bodies parts for well let’s say special tools and some of them were meals for me and my friend.”
“I’m really gonna die here!” I frantically thought to myself.
“Special… tools?” I question
“Well I try not to say anything to humans because I know it will alarm them but Sex toys… I made sex toys out of them.”
“You… You sick fuck!!!”
“Hey don’t knock it till you try it. For instance if you take the scale removed everything out of it, clean it, and lubricate the eye holes it makes an awesome sex toy. It gives you all the pleasure without any mess. Also human transformation meat taste amazing.”
“Like I said you sick fuck!!”
He growls “Maybe I should just kill you instead, then I won’t have to hear your nasty mouth anymore.”
“No no no!!!” I scream “I shut up!!!”
“That’s better.”
The guy turns around with two syringes in each hand, one was white color and the other one was red color. He begins to walk back up to me.
He chuckles "So are you ready to be cure of your sins?
“What are those? What are you gonna do to me?”
“Well remember what I told you about what happened to these people? Well this red liquid here is gonna do the same to you.” He smiles and ejects me with the red liquid.
“Haha enjoy the process!!!”
I sat there, I could feel the liquid traveling through my blood stream and it feels weird and unsettling. My body starts feeling tingling all over but that tingling feeling have turn into a hellish unmerciful pain. Scales rip out of my skin one after another all over my body; I felt new bones and flash growing, painfully rearranging to form thick tail; My muscle felt like there was on fire, each second they grow bigger and bigger along as well as my body; I look down at my now unclothe lower half, my cock hadn’t change much but it was much much bigger than before, as while as the balls too; my head ache greatly, Comes to find out that my skull was forming to one’s of a Triceratops.
I break from the chair and fall to my knees
“Make it stop…MAKE IT STOP!!!"
“It will end soon you crybaby!”
I let my head hang down, seeing my hands growing, my fingers grows thicker and bolder; nails turns to coal black and grows alongside my fingers; both hands had a more rough and tuff feel and look to them now. Soon after my hands finish growing the transformation stop and the pain soon fade away.
“Well well well you survive the transformation, I guess it was this pain killer… stuff.” Him and I looks at the unused syringe fill with the white liquid.
“…” I didn’t respond.
“Oh well” He carelessly throws the syringe behind him “Now im really surprise that you survive and how you turn out!”
“Wha… What am I?”
“It looks like you’re a anthropomorphic Triceratops, how interesting. Wonder why you turn out different or why you didn’t die like the others. I must study you, Stand up!”
I got up with no hesitation.
“Good slave.” He starts walking around me, looking me up and down. “Mmm what a nice body you have now…” He removes his gloves, revealing his green scaly claws. He places his claw on the top of my chest and he starts to feel me down but then he stops at my belly button “Oh my…” he grabs one of my hands.
“Do you… like my hands sir?” I asks him in a soft voice.
Alligator tail pov
"I just don’t like them, I LOVE them!!!
“Really sir?” A big smile grows on his face.
"Hell yeah big guy!!! There so big, so manly… “I took off my mask to sniff his godly hand.
“Oh my… You’re…you’re…”
“Yes im an alligator. Surprise surprise.” He really shouldn’t be so surprised, it wasn’t like I didn’t show any signs that I wasn’t an alligator but whatever.
I place his hand over my face, murrrrss his hand is so big that he could crush my skull with ease if he wanted. His hand feels warm, a tad sweaty (He must be nervous. How cute), and very heavy. I takes a deep breath taking in his wonderful nasty stench. I began licking them they tasted salty, bitter and sweet? (Im starting to wonder what this guy was doing with his hands before I capture him. Comes to think about it he did have his hands in his pants before I got him).
My pants began to tighten in the front, I think it’s time for me to take them off. I look down to unbutton my pants but I was soon greeted by a head, a cock head to be exact.
It drips pre-cum and it’s looks like it been turn on hard for a while.
“So you’re enjoying this?” I ask while I wipe up his cum and tastes it.
“Yes I do.” He blush.
“You don’t think im a sick fuck still?”
"No actually I think you’re unbelievably sexy… WAIT?! Why do I think you’re sexy, why do I have a erection, What’s wrong with me?! "
“It’s my formula big guy. It didn’t just change your body, It’s changing your mind too.” I took off my pants, revealing my erect penis.
“What the hell do you mean you lovely fuck?!”
“Soon you will uncontrollably love and do whatever I say sexy.”
“No… no I won’t! You took away my humanity, you’re not taking away my free will!!!”
I laughs “Come to me my slave! Me and you are gonna have some fun!!!”
I watch as he struggles to come to me. He really thinks that he can fight my control. How funny.
“Get on your knees!”
He did what I say with little to no hesitation.
“I want you to give me the best hand job you ever give to any and make it on the slow side too!”
As soon I finish giving my command, he grabs my penis with both of his hands. I jump a little, I wasn’t really ready to feel is warm strong hands on my genitalia but MY GOD IT FEELS GOOD!!! He starts stroking up and down slowly, feeling the pleasure starting to building up all ready unfortunately. Then he starts to goes faster, oh damn im all ready to blow my load and we just begun, why did I make him too sexy.
“Stop!!!” Hoping to prolong this sensations before I blow.
He did as I told.
“Go!!!”
He starts back up but as soon he yank up I lost it. My cum shoots on his face and he began to clean me and himself off.
“Oh my slave… me and you are gonna have many fun nights together slave…”